How to make Detailed Rp's.

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Everwill · Posted: Tue Jan 30, 2007 12:32 pm Post subject: How to make Detailed Rp's.

OK, so I'm taking it upon myself to make a little thread here, that tells some of the newer and less experienced Rper's on here how to make some good and detailed posts. It's not really all that hard, it just takes some thought. I'll go through it in a step system.

1. Length

Length isn't always a factor in creating good Rp's, but it shows how well you are able to expand on things. An average Rp should have about four to six lines consisting of it, anything that has under that in context is just pathetic. You can make posts longer by putting more detail onto things, but don't drag them out too long, or else the attention of the reader will be brought to an end. You can also make things longer by inputting your character's thoughts on a situation, or have him or her say somehting about one thing or another. On this site there is no minimum line limit, but please try your best to post more than 2 lines.

2. Quality

The quality of a post often makes or breaks it. If a post went somehting like this....

'everwill jumpe dup grabbed the sword and cut the man in half'

....not many people would be impressed. The length of the post is incredibly short, there is no detail whatsoever, and there are spelling and grammatical errors. An example of making this post better, would be....

' Using all of the energy in his legs, Everwill jumped up towards the shining hilt of the blade. With an outstretched hand he clasped his fingers around the cold steel, and brought the blade down from its resting place. He turned to face the man, the man who had killed his family. With a cold look in his eye, Everwill charged forwards, ducking under the initial swing from the man's blade, feeling the wind coming from the strike, and swiftly bringing his own blade across the mans lower abdomen. Blood began to spray from the incision as Everwill stood up, and sheathed the blade he had slew the man with. '

Much better, No? An easy way of making a detailed post is to post what you origionally want. Then go through the post, which means PROOF READING IT, and add detail where you see it to be necessary.

3. Purpose

Posts should prove a certain purpose. Don't post for the sake of posting, but post to move storyline or plot along. For instance,

'Jimmy was hungry, so Jimmy went to the mall, bought a sandwich, ate it, and came back ready to fight.'

That post did absolutely nothing. Sure, you could say he replenished his hunger, but where did it get him in the story? nowhere. Now the other rper has to make the move again. To make this post better,

'Jimmy was hungry before his match, so he pulled a small snackbar out of his pouch on the ground, and ate it quickly. He approached the ring once again, and put on his wrestling helmet. He then ran at the opponent trying to grapple him.'

See how that post moved the storyline along? Now an attack has been thrown, and the other rper has something to rp about, instead of just admiring how delicious the snackbar looked.

HOWEVER, the only exception to this rule is if the sotryline cannot progress any farther than it has without another person rping (if there are more than 2 people.). If this is the case, please, wait. RPing is about patience, beleive it or not, and continuing a story without waiting for another person's permission would only result in an awkward re-entry post, and most likely an innacurate one as well. If the person has been absent for a week, just edit your last post saying that you left the thread.

4. Spelling and Grammar

Unless you want to confuse your rping partner like mad, please, try to spell things right and use the proper grammar. if i went on in a long sentence like i am about to do without using any grammar whatsoever it will be very long and bvery hard to ready because i will unbdoubtedly throw in some spellign mistakes just to thrw you of so plz try not to do what i am doing right now. Use proper grammar, for all of our sakes.

Well, thats it. I hope it helps you all in making some better posts. If anyone has anything to add, please comment at the bottom.
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OzanaruSyra · Posted: Tue Jan 30, 2007 3:30 pm Post subject:

I'd also like to add, description. Description will not only make your post better, but it will sound nicer to.

Example:

Syra walked through the forest, at night. She stopped, sensing a man behind her.

What you should do:

The moon shone through the eaves, casting eerie shadows along the forest floor. The sky a dark purplish hue, spoke of evil through the silent night. Leaves crunched under the weight of her feet. The sound echoed through the quiet forest. She walked slowly, pushing aside branches as they blocked her.
Syra's eyes darted, and she stopped dead. The wind whispered in her ear, as she opened her mouth to speak. " You there, stop or face death."
She half turned, and stared at the man. Her eyes flared, her body tense. She shifted her weight, ready for a quick retreat in the forest.

See the difference?

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Tegatus Hirokimi · Posted: Tue Jan 30, 2007 6:11 pm Post subject:

You just reposted his "Quality" topic in that post...

Ah, yes, nice "tutorial" Everwill, maybe we'll get better RPers now ^_^
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Everwill · Posted: Tue Jan 30, 2007 10:33 pm Post subject:

yeah, thanks Teg. And Teg is right Syra, Quality and Descirption seem to fall under the same topic. But nice try though, it's nice to see that some people care about quality rp's.
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OzanaruSyra · Posted: Wed Jan 31, 2007 10:30 am Post subject:

Good point, but I forgot to add personality.

Personality

Characters should have moods, and emotions. They can have an ultimate goal, but rping that one thing all the time will make your character more of an empty shell. Give your character a 'life', as in they do things not really required, but for recreation and such. Also giving your character a general attitude will help as well. In personality includes romance and drama. Both of these greatly improve your posts, and adds much more to a detailed storyline.

Yeah, that didn't flow like I meant it but you get the point.

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Rorschach · Posted: Wed Jan 31, 2007 6:48 pm Post subject:

Good tut. But I'll move it. Conversation thread is only for conversation threads!

Where to move.....I think you just earned a topic in the rules! *Gasp*

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