Burning fist

Prowl NightWolf · Posted: Wed Apr 23, 2008 11:20 am Post subject: Burning fist

Name: Katon: nenshouken [Fire style: Burning fist]
Type: Taijutsu
Rank: B
Requirements: Main element must be fire; Must first know a fighting style such as Renge[Lotus], Jyuuken[Gentle fist], or other taijutsu…
Description: A Taijutsu created by Kodo Raptor It gives greater strength to his Taijutsu by adding his fire element into the mix. A Trigram appears on the ground with the Katon symbol in the center after the ninja holds the Tiger hand sign. The ninja’s own chakra surges from their body and burns like fire around them. The ninja will then attack in the same manner as the original Taijutsu. This jutsu gives the added effect of causing burns to an area touched by the chakra released. The chakra release will quickly causes strain on the body as time passes so extended use should be limited.

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Uchiha Katsuga · Posted: Wed Apr 23, 2008 4:35 pm Post subject:

For the name, I say call it "Enjin no Hi", which basically means "Fire's Ring". That was off topic, just helping, heh. Anyway, it does seem interesting though, but what kind of strain would it put on the user since they'll be using the Lotus?
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MinatoNamikaze · Posted: Wed Apr 23, 2008 5:21 pm Post subject:

well its not specifically used with Lotus, he is just saying it would be better if used in conjunction I am thinking. but this is fairly nice looking. Constantly draining chakra I assume? if so add it if not then it doesnt make sense <,<
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Kaeor · Posted: Wed Apr 23, 2008 7:40 pm Post subject:

I already have a jutsu named Ring of Fire.

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Prowl NightWolf · Posted: Thu Apr 24, 2008 9:05 am Post subject:

Kat: Well I didn't have a Japanese translation for the name so that would still be on topic

MinatoNamikaze: Naturally it would drain chakra that is a given with any Jutsu. It is a element inhancment of basic tai fighting styles. With the Jyuuken[Gentle fist] the Ninja's chakra would do the exact same thing as the normal Jyuuken[Gentle fist] only with the added effect of creating internal burns. With Renge[Lotus] the burn effects would be more direct. The temp in the circle would also increase drasticly. As it says a fighting style is required as well as your primary element being fire.

Kaeor: ??? Well then a name change is in order... Any ideas would be helpful... Very Happy

Edit: Okay so I changed the name from ring of Fire to Burning fist, and also rewrote the discription to include a chakra drawback.

Roleplaying Characters:
Kodo Raptor - Leaf Chuunin
Airazor - Kodo's Peregrine Falcon pet-nin
Prowl "Yoru Ouka" Raptor - C Rank missing-nin
Skyshadow, Yoru's Nin-owl
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Village: Konohagakure (Leaf) | None
Training Points: 00
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Zeke Jamora · Posted: Thu Apr 24, 2008 7:46 pm Post subject:

I actually like this technique, but at the same time, you're not giving me enough detail. I mean, you do give enough detail but...how'd about I just come out and say it?

Do your fist catch on Fire?
Also, does your Chakra turn into Pure fire?
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Haldur · Posted: Thu Apr 24, 2008 8:16 pm Post subject:

The diction of the description is confusing. Try to keep it as simple as possible while providing an accurate description.
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Prowl NightWolf · Posted: Fri Apr 25, 2008 10:32 am Post subject:

Zeke Jamora · Posted: Fri Apr 25, 2008 3:20 pm Post subject:

I see no problem with the jutsu. I'm going to accept it.
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