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Xarnt · Posted: Tue Jul 01, 2008 7:50 pm Post subject: Itichi, Zarn - Rice Country

Name: Itichi, Zarn
Age: 17
Gender: Mate
Height: 6'5''
Weight: 270 Pounds

Appearance:
Zarn is above averge height for his age, at 6'5''. He is extremely muscular weighing in at 270 Pounds. Zarn has a reasonable tanned skin tone, with medium length dark black hair. Zarn has only two scared on his body, one on his back, near his shoulder. The other is on his torso, near his ribs. Both are from a childhood accident.

He wears a simple Red Flak Jacket which covers black leather body-armor. He wears long, loose fitting black pants with a utility belt. He wears his head-band strapped around his right bicep, still in clear view. He has a sheath slung across his back which holds one of his sword, with the other at his waist. He also wears a long black cloak, a red head-band which supports his hair and also a tabard over his torso, bearing the symbol of the Otokage. In essence, Zarn is extremly intimidating to look at.

Spoiler:

Race: European Decent
Hair: Black, Medium Length
Eyes: Black
Body: Well Built
Ethnicity: Ta no Kuni

Fame: 2000
Reputation: 0

Level/Rank: Jounin, SS-rank
Village: Otogakure
Bloodline: Riyukous [3rd Stage]
Main/Favored Weapon: Duel Katana's
Element: Water, Earth, Katon
Fighting Type/Style: Main; Genjutsu [Specialist]
Starting Inventory:
Katana x 2
Tanto
Kunai x 10
Smoke Bomb x 5
Wire
Soilder Pill x 5

Personality:
In general Zarn is pleasant. He is a calm man who is not easily impressed, yet he is easy to anger. Zarn will be polite to all and is rather easy to get along with, he is extremely laid back. Despite his easy-going attitude, when he is angered he doesn’t yell or scream, he simply kills, quickly and without remorse. Zarn has always been a 'Ladies-Man' and has a weakness for a cute girl with a nice smile, due to this he is often seen as sexist in favor as females

Mastery:
Extreme Genjutsu Mastery

Jutsus: [23 Extra Jutsu Slots] [28/43 Jutsu's Used]
E-Rank
All Basics

D-Rank
Name: Shunshin no Jutsu - Body Flicker Technique
[Type: Ninjutsu
Rank: D
Requirements: None
Description: Shunshin no Jutsu is a basic Ninjutsu technique. The ninja will appear and disappear in an instant, allowing them to retreat or attack suddenly. To facilitate the movement the ninja will often use nearby elements such as mist, sand or leaves to mask their appearance or disappearance. While it may seem like the user simply appeared or disappeared, the technique is actually a momentary increase in movement speed towards a set location. ]

C-Rank
[Magen: Jigoku Koka no Jutsu [Demonic Illusion: Descending Hell Technique]
Rank: C
Requirements: None
Description: Jigoku Koka no Jutsu is a Genjutsu that causes its opponent to see a vision of a tremendous ball of fire that will descend from the sky to envelope the target. The victims of the jutsu will believe they are being engulfed by a torrent of fire and will flee from their location to safety. ]

Name: Kankaku Gyoutai [Sensory Delay]
Type: Genjutsu
Rank: C
Requirements: None
Description: This jutsu operates on the principle of "the hand is quicker than the eye", a phrase the user will often say just before activating it. It delays the target's sensory perceptions by one second, making it seem as though time has paused. The pause is only one second long, so it seems as though it never really happened. The user will then continue the battle, but the opponent will think the user is one place, while they were there a full second before. This allows the user to usually get in two or three hits before the target becomes aware of the delay. After this the target might realize it is Genjutsu and use Genjutsu Kai, or they might not realize it and just try to anticipate one second in advance.

[Magen: Kokuni Arazu no Jutsu [Demonic Illusion: False Surrounding Skill]
Rank: C
Requirements: None
Description: A genjutsu technique that makes the victim believe that he/she is in a totally different surrounding than they really are. This can create an advantage for the user because only the user would have the true idea of the layout of the battlefield, while their opponent does not.

[Rank: C
Requirements: N/A
Description: A Ninjutsu technique where the ninja focuses their chakra and screams "kai" or "release." They can perform it on themselves or on others. It will effectively ward off most Genjutsu, unless extremely powerful or when used in conjunction with an advanced bloodline.]

[Magen: Narakumi no Jutsu [Demonic Illusion: Vision of Hell Skill]
Rank: C
Requirements: None
Description: A genjutsu attack where the target would suddenly experience or see the thing they fear the most right in front of them. This genjutsu is highly effective on the lower level shinobi such as gennin, academy students, and even some chuunin who are exceptionally weak against genjutsu.]

[Magen: Kori Shinchuu no Jutsu [Demonic Illusion: Sly Fellow Mind Skill]
Rank: C
Requirements: None
Description: A genjutsu skill that causes the victim to walk aimlessly in circles while convincing them that they are still traveling in the correct direction. This is a great jutsu for confusing and weakening your opponent right before attacking them.]

B-Rank
Hien [Flying Swallow]
Rank: B
Requirements: Blades
Description: Using chakra to extend the blades of the userâ€™s blades, the user charges almost directly at their opponent with movements so swift it almost seems like they are flying. This usually results with a near-fatal blow across the chest to the target.

[Konoha Gouriki Senpuu [Leaf Herculean Whirlwind]
Rank: B
Requirements: None
Description: A taijutsu technique where the user spins with all of their strength and delivers a powerful, spinning, heel kick, blasting their opponent back. This kick can also be used to disarm an opponent since this kick is powerful enough to easily knock a weapon out of the opponent's hand. It is a much stronger version of the Konoha Daisenpuu [Leaf Great Whirlwind].]

A-Rank
[Friend of My Enemy Jutsu]
Rank: A
Requirements: N/A
Description: This is a jutsu specialized in mentally un-balancing your opponent. This will make the user appear as multiple people from the enemies past that he has loved or lost. This will almost always make it impossible for the enemy to fight.
Post duration: 4 posts

[Magen: Jubaku Satsu [Demonic Illusion: Tree Bind Death]
Rank: A
Requirements: None
Description: With this jutsu, the user can make themselves disappear so that they can approach their opponent unnoticed. Once near the desired target, a tree will grow at the target's feet and branches from an illusory tree will bind them from behind so that they are unable to even move or use hand seals. Once the opponent believes that they are captured, the user can then reappear from above the tree and quickly kill the opponent, preferably with a kunai.

[Melting flesh Jutsu
Rank: A
Requirements:N/A
Description: This will cause an opponent to feel and see the flesh on his bones slowly waste away. The look of this is will cause tremendous fear and pain, rendering the enemy useless in combat.
Post duration: 4 posts]

[Name: Futae Kakkou Datsuryoku [Double Form Strength Sap]
Type: Genjutsu
Rank: A
Requirements: None
Description: After activating this jutsu, the user will usually launch a series of swift taijutsu attacks at the target. The target will think the user is growing stronger with each hit, when in actuality it is they who are seemingly growing weaker. This is also a double form jutsu, so even using Genjutsu Kai once will not stop it, and it is not visual so an eye Bloodline cannot see through it.. The strength reduction is gradual, usually ten percent every minute for five minutes, but it is enough to make a difference. What this jutsu actually does is trick the mind into limiting the muscles of the body even more than it already does, and in this manner the strength reduction becomes real. This jutsu will last half an hour or until successfully dispelled twice.]

[Name: Bikukyu no Jutsu [Hypnosis Skill]
Type: GenJutsu
Rank: A
Requirements: Must be an Anbu, Hunter or Tracker Ninja.
Description: An Anbu Interrogation technique. This illusion is used to get secret documents from certain shinobi. The shinobi will fall asleep, but will mumble information about anything being asked. However, this skill doesn't do much good, if the subject doesn't know anything, or has a Strong Will and Mind.]

[Name: Magan (Demon illision)
Type: Genjutsu
Rank: A
Requirements: Connection of the eyes from user to target. If used in a profile, the profile must be approved by Zieg.
Description: This jutsu requiers mass concentration to preform. The user first creates a hand seal, and begins to focue chakra. Once this happens the user must then make eye sight with his opponent. Once done the genjutsu takes effect. The user's concentraited chakra temporarly knocks an opponent unconscious, for about one to two seconds. During this time the user can make movements, striking his opponent, or avoiding him. The target doesn't realize he or she was put under the genjutsu, therefor not realizing it happened at all. It will only appear as if the user has teleported]

[Art of Fake Death
Requirements: N/A
Rank: A
This genjutsu only works while being attacked by an opponent with something deadly. The genjutsu uses the last attack and creates a image where the user fails to finish creating a jutsu in time making the attack look like a success and completely killing the user. The whole illusion is made to lure the opponent into a false sense of security for a sneak attack, or to make a hasty retreat if necessary.
Post duration: Indefinite; keep in mind the chakra drain though.]

[Horror Mirrors
Rank: A
Requirement: Sly Fellow Mind Jutsu / Demonic Illusion: Double False Surrounding Skill
Description: The user casting this jutsu must already have the sly fellow mind jutsu in place. He will then cast the Horror Mirrors jutsu over top of that, causing the opponent to aimlessly walk from place to place viewing mirrors that show him horrible memories of his past.
Post duration: 4 posts]

S-Rank [3/3]
Name: Judgement Gate
Rank: S
Requirements: Extreme GenJutsu mastery.
Description: In order to perform the technique, the caster must be at a close range from the opponent. Placing five of their fingertips at five different pressure points around the opponents heart, the user pours his psychological (genjutsu) chakra into their mind and soul. The enemy blacks out, then soon awakens at a large gate made of bones and wandering souls. The gates open with a monsterous roaring as cloaked devil emerges riding on a chariot being pulled by four undead horses. The "reaper" completely runs through the target, ripping their soul out as he passes by, almost completely destroying their mind. The drawback is the chakra produced to use the GenJutsu is nearly all of the reserves a Ninja can hold, making the Jutsu only useable either with back-up or in a one versus one.

[Name: Genjutsu Kai kaunta (Genjutsu release counter)
Type: Genjutsu
Rank: S [Kinjutsu]
Requirements: The target must preform Genjutsu kai, while being effected by a genjutsu. If used in a profile, the profile must be approved by Zieg.
Description: An extremely powerful genjutsu, developed, and created by Zieg. This jutsu counters the effects of Genjutsu kai, but a requierment must be met. First the target must be inflicted by a genjutsu. Next he or she must then preform genjutsu kai. Once the technique has been used genjutsu kai kaunta must be activated. The genjutsu fools the mind into believing a genjutsu has really been countered, and then puts an opponent in yet another genjutsu, fooling the mind into believing its making the actions the opponent wishes. This is an extremely powerful technique, which puts a large amount of strain on the user]

[Name: Sumitsuki no bachiatari (Black seal of the accursed)
Type: Kinjutsu
Rank: S
Requirements: Head admin or co admin approval. Must obtain from Zieg. Must be from Otogakure (unless given special permission)
Description: The technique is a jutsu invented by Itichi Zieg, made from his own hormones and blood. It is also infused with blood from a normal human. The seal can be put upon someone by only Zieg. Using special handseals if Zieg touches someone's body he can put the seal on someone. Once placed the seal with start to drain the body of all the victim's chakra. If the chakra isn't enough to satisfy the seal it will drain a person until they die. The process usually takes about a whole day. The victim will feel intense pain all over their body for 24 hours. If they cannot take it mentally then it will kill them. Once inflicted and done the seal will appear somewhere on the user's body. The seal is a black crescent moon. Once done the vitcim will then go on a blind rage for an hour, not being able to tell the difference in friend or foe. After the rage they will fall into a state of unconsciousness. There are stages of the seal that one can obtain by either putting their body through massive pain or willingly giving their chakra to the seal, which could kill them and only give them half capacity of the power.

Effects
Curse Seal: Level 0
The seal will be placed upon the body and constantly drain the user's chakra, though its not a rate fast enough to leave one weakened but it will need to be fed the chakra, in order to keep it stable. If not fed then the seal will kill the user. This stage gives no special bonuses or abilities.

Curse Seal: Level 1
The user must feed the seal a suitable amount of chakra. Once done the seal will activate. It would start to burn red and spread along the user's skin. It will make the user turn completely pitch black and their chakra will become visible, flowing around them like a smoke. Their chakra will turn to a dark purple color. Their eyes will become a white color. Their eye will disappear, leaving only the iris. The seal enhances physical performance by 25%. Their chakra will also increase by 25%, making jutsu feel more powerful than they are. In this state the seal will continue to chew at the user's chakra. If in this state for too long the seal will deactivate unwillingly, leaving the user weak and unable to preform jutsu of any kind. The seal however can be released at will, but will still leave the user drained by a certain amount for activation.
Duration: 10 posts

Curse Seal: Level 2
The user must feed the seal half of their chakra. If they however do not have the chakra to feed it with then they will die instantly. The seal will begin to cover the body once more. However unlike last time the body will not become completely black but simply make the skin a black tone. The user's hair will grow substantially and turn dark red. The seal also makes the user's hands become demonic. Making them grow claws and forcing wings out of their shoulder blades. The wings look like devil wings or bat wings. The user will also grow a tail, similar to a dinosaur's. The seal, instead of forcing chakra out of the body like last time, but rather eating the user's chakra will not have the same visual effect as the previous seal. The user's physical performance will increase by 55% and their chakra will increase dramatically, making most jutsu feel more powerful. It will also allow the user the ability to fly. The seal can not last very long and if the user doesn't willingly release it it will eat all of their chakra and kill them. Even when willingly releasing the seal the activation cost will leave them weak and most likely unconscious if they are not strong enough to take the seal.
Duration: 5 posts ]

[Doton: Doruki Gaeshi [Earth Release: Earth Land Deflection]
Rank: C
Requirements: None
Description: A Doton (earth element) ninjutsu technique where the ninja digs into the ground beneath them and tears up a solid wall of dirt and rock. The shield of earth is held together by the ninja's chakra and is meant to take the driving force of a physical attack.]

[Doton: Kekkai Doroudomo [Earth Release: Earth Barrier Prison]
Rank: B
Requirements: None
Description: A Doton (earth element) ninjutsu technique where the ninja plants their hands on the ground and creates a dome of pure dirt and rock around their enemy. The dome has a layer of chakra inside it that keeps it together, so that any damage done to it or the ground is instantly repaired. While in control of this clay prison, the ninja using this technique also draws out the chakra of their enemy or enemies, taking it for them self. In this manner, the ninja can keep this clay prison up almost indefinitely, making it a very incredible ninjutsu]

[Hiru Bansho: Boka no Jutsu [Leech All Creation: Attack Prevention Technique]
Rank: B
Requirements: None
The user merges with or within a nearby object, taking on its properties, and avoiding any damage. They can then use the properties they merge with as an attack by using Douka Yahumuki [Assimilated Blizzard]]

[Katon: Kasumi Engo no Jutsu [Fire Release: Covering Mist Technique]
Rank: B
Requirements: None
Description: The user blows out a great amount of burnable gas. Once it comes in contact with any form of combustion force (from fire to small sparks), the gas ignites and literally creates a sea of fire. ]

[Katon: Housenka no Jutsu [Fire Release: Mythical Fire Flower Technique]
Rank: C
Requirements: None
Description: This Katon (fire element) ninjutsu is an extremely powerful and flexible technique. Housenka begins with creating many small, yet powerful fireballs from the userâ€™s mouth, and shooting them at a single or multiple opponents in one strike. These projectiles either can be shot from fast in the same direction, to slow in a rotating formation. Basically, the ninja controls everything, from the strength, and path of the fireballs, to the speed they travel towards the target.]

Bloodline jutsus:
[Name: Genjutsu reversal
Type: Genjutsu
Rank: B
Requirements: Riyukous stage three
Description: When the user is inflicted by an opponent's genjutsu he or she can use their chakra to counter the genjutsu along with their eyes. This technique only works on jutsu that is of equal rank or lower to this one. Cannot be used on shinobi of higher rank.]

[Name: Hells Vision: Black Destruction
Type: Genjutsu
Rank: A
Requirements: Stage Three Riyukous Eye. Eye contact
Description: The user stares into the eye of his opponent and creates an illusion within the mind. Using an immense force of chakra the user makes an illusion of the user being in a wasteland. The wasteland is dark and everything is almost gray. Suddenly form below their feet a large black orb appears and surrounds the opponent in a large area, about 100 feet in diameter. The orb then quickly comes in, sinking into the ground and getting smaller as it goes along, eventually crushing the target. Once done the opponent's body will feel fatigues and tired. The mind will greatly be stressed and fatigued as well. The technique takes a lot out of the user and can only be used five times a day or else the user will collapse if used a sixth time.]

[Name: Illuminating Rose technique
Rank: A
Requierments: Eye contact and stage three riyukous or handseals.
Type: Genjutsu
Description: The user disappeares into a flurry of rose petals. The rose petals begins to blow everywhere around the opponent. The genjutsu works the opponent's eyes, making them less visible when inside the flurry of petals. When moving sometimes the user leaves mirages of him or herself. The Genjutsu lasts as long as the user con keep his chakra flow going through out the area. But the genjutsu can be maintained no longer than five post.]

[Name: Magan (Demon illision eye)
Type: Genjutsu
Rank: A
Requirements: Eye contact. Stage three Riyukous
Description: This jutsu requiers mass concentration to preform. The user first creates a hand seal, and begins to focue chakra. Once this happens the user must then make eye sight with his opponent. Once done the genjutsu takes effect. The user's concentraited chakra temporarly knocks an opponent unconscious, for about one to two seconds. During this time the user can make movements, striking his opponent, or avoiding him. The target doesn't realize he or she was put under the genjutsu, therefor not realizing it happened at all. It will only appear as if the user has teleported.]

[Name: Vision of Hell
Type: Genjutsu
Rank: A
Requirements: Stage three Riyukous
Description: The user stares at a target and then messes with the brain, causing them to see a scenario within their mind. The user will make the target see whatever he wants. Usually something scary or horrific. Even their own death. The technique should cause the opponent to be frozen in fear. Cannot work on shinobi of higher rank. The technique is instant and lasts for only one post.]

[Name: Destructive Vision Technique
Type: Genjutsu
Rank: B
Requirements: Eye contact. Stage three Riyukous or else requires handseals.
Description: Just by looking into the eyes of a target the Riyukous eye can disrupt the speed to which signals are sent to the eye, making an opponent's vision become horrible. The eyes will become slow, unable to keep up with real time speed. The genjutsu lasts for three posts]

[Name: Deep Sleep Gaze
Type: Genjutsu
Rank: B
Requirements: Stage Three Riyukous or handseals
Description: The user stares at an opponent deep into their eyes. The user's chakra will make an opponent groggy and fall asleep. If used with the seal the genjutsu becomes stronger but regardless the jutsu will not work on someone who is of higher rank. The genjutsu can be held as long as the user stares at them or holds the seal.]

Jutsus you want to Learn:
Many.

Missions Completed:
D-Rank:0
C-Rank:0
B-Rank:0
A-Rank:0
S-Rank:0

Background:
Zarn was born in Ta no Kuni. His mother died in birth and his father was a shinobi for Otogakure. Through Zarn's early years he was raised by his Father, a cold and cruel man who was tainted by his years of bloodshed and war, pushed over the edge by the death of his beloved wife, for which he blamed Zarn.

Zarn’s academy years weren’t anything overly special, due to the way he was raised he was somewhat of a loner, yet popular at the same time. He kept to himself, he was mysterious. Zarn excelled in Genjutsu and Taijutsu, He was the best constantly, and he was always the best. Sadly Zarn lacked the ability of Ninjutsu, every now and then he would get it right but it was rare for him. Zarn didn't mind, he enjoyed the subtle art of toying with people minds via Genjutsu, or even the feeling of a bone breaking in your bare hands, via Taijutsu.

During his time at the academy his Sensei's became fearful for Zarn, but mainly for the other students as there was a long string of 'Accidents' involving Zarn and people whom had apparently argued with him earlier. Zarn swore he had nothing to do with it, but it was common knowledge that he was lying yet without proof; there was nothing the academy could do.

Four months before Zarn graduated his Father committed suicide. It was at this time that men came to him, other member's of the Itichi family. They told Zarn of the gift he possessed, they called it a bloodline. Over the year or so Zarn lived in the Clan house and was taught the ways of the Riyukous.

Zarn's Genin years went smoothly, no major incidents other then extreme training via his clan master and also his half brother, Noah Itichi. Throughout Zarn's Chuunin and Jounin years, he continued training with Noah for the majority of his time, doing the occasional mission and making the occasional trip to Zieg, the Otokage.

Years have passed, one late night Zarn was summoned via a messenger of Zieg to the lowest room in the Otokage-Tower, in this room an event transpired that changed Zarn's history for life. After long discussion it was determined that Zarn would become the Third Otokage, as Zieg went on a personal journey. Zarn is currently the ruling Otokage of Otokagure.

Years on, Zarn was on a routine trip to the Ninja Village of Kirigakure to broker an end to the war between the two great villages. Zarn was accompanied by a team of 4 ANBU Bear from his village. Halfway through the journey, in the dead of night the group was attacked. The ANBU on watch was killed silently, all three of the reamining ANBU where slaughtered whilst Zarn was captured.

He spent a total of 6 months in captivity, constantly drugged and blindfolded, enduring wave after wave of torture for a seemingly non-exsistant reason. Evenchaly there was an attack, Zarn woke one night to hear explosions, being in a drugged state of confusion Zarn simply managed to stagger to his feet and out through a hole that had been blown in the wall via a stray exploding tag. Zarn made his way away from the fortress, walking for days on end, folowing the footsteps of other until avenchly, after weeks of travel, finding himself back at a changed Otogakure, a new Otogakure.

Zarn now lives in solitude inside Otogakure, only ever venturing out into public if it is to defend his village. He lives as a private citizen, respecting the rule of the New Kage, vowing not to return to the public eye until war once more strikes his home.

Roleplaying Characters:
Rai, Sophia
Saren, Willow
Ria 'Kaguya', Isabella
Hyuudou, Skye
RPG Stats:
Shinobi Rank: SS Raikage ~ S-Jounin x 2 ~ Missing Nin
Village: Kumo x 2 ~ Kiri ~ None
Fame: 0
Reputation:
Training Points: 440
Inventory: All have many of the following; Kunai, Shuriken, Senbon, Wire, Katana, Speacilized Weapons.

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Xarnt · Posted: Tue Jul 01, 2008 7:52 pm Post subject:

Er, Iv recently been told that I need to ask permission for this bloodline from its creator, I havn't done that yet so im geussing this can't be approved until I have?
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Roleplaying Characters:
Rai, Sophia
Saren, Willow
Ria 'Kaguya', Isabella
Hyuudou, Skye
RPG Stats:
Shinobi Rank: SS Raikage ~ S-Jounin x 2 ~ Missing Nin
Village: Kumo x 2 ~ Kiri ~ None
Fame: 0
Reputation:
Training Points: 440
Inventory: All have many of the following; Kunai, Shuriken, Senbon, Wire, Katana, Speacilized Weapons.

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Mitsuaki Ryuujin · Posted: Tue Jul 01, 2008 8:20 pm Post subject:

Yes that and....

1. You can't have Extreme or Excellent as a Genin, you are only allowed Above average or Below average

2. Strong and Fast are two different Strengths

3. You have strong and fast as strengths but you have no physical weaknesses, balance them.

That's all I see for the moment ^^

EDIT: oh btw it's Itichi not Itachi
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Theme Song

Roleplaying Characters:
Noah Amimura(Itichi)
Mitsuaki Ryuujin
Fuukyou Uchiha
No 4th RPC
RPG Stats:
Shinobi Rank: SS-Rank
Village: Sunagakure
Fame: 2000
Reputation:
Training Points: 50
Inventory: Samehada (15) Kunai, (20) Shuriken, (50) Feet of wire, (10) Smoke bombs, (15) Explosive Tags, (5) Soldier Pills

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Xarnt · Posted: Tue Jul 01, 2008 8:45 pm Post subject:

Cheers Mate Smile

Alright, Fixed.
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****Midnight Shadow****

Roleplaying Characters:
Rai, Sophia
Saren, Willow
Ria 'Kaguya', Isabella
Hyuudou, Skye
RPG Stats:
Shinobi Rank: SS Raikage ~ S-Jounin x 2 ~ Missing Nin
Village: Kumo x 2 ~ Kiri ~ None
Fame: 0
Reputation:
Training Points: 440
Inventory: All have many of the following; Kunai, Shuriken, Senbon, Wire, Katana, Speacilized Weapons.

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Zieg · Posted: Tue Jul 01, 2008 10:09 pm Post subject:

I like the profile a lot. I just have a couple suggestions and one problem.

Problem:
Strengths:
+ Above average speed.
+ Above average Reflex's.

Weaknesses:
- Weak Right Ankle due to Child-Hood Injury

I believe if you have a weak ankle then you shouldn't at all have the strength to place yourself above average speed, nor could you have quick reflexes. If you keep the weakness then I suggest having more detail added to the two strengths.

Suggestions:
More detail in appearance
Add one more paragraph within the history and

you're good.
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Itichi Zieg's Theme - Zetsubou Billy

Roleplaying Characters:
Itichi Zieg
Hyuudou, Kiyo
No 3rd RPC
No 4th RPC
RPG Stats:
Shinobi Rank: (SS) Missing Nin - (SS) Missing Nin
Village: None - None
Fame: 3000
Reputation:
Training Points: None
Inventory: Pending

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Xarnt · Posted: Tue Jul 01, 2008 10:29 pm Post subject:

Thanks for catching that, I completly missed the Ankle confliction.
Fixed.
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****Midnight Shadow****

Roleplaying Characters:
Rai, Sophia
Saren, Willow
Ria 'Kaguya', Isabella
Hyuudou, Skye
RPG Stats:
Shinobi Rank: SS Raikage ~ S-Jounin x 2 ~ Missing Nin
Village: Kumo x 2 ~ Kiri ~ None
Fame: 0
Reputation:
Training Points: 440
Inventory: All have many of the following; Kunai, Shuriken, Senbon, Wire, Katana, Speacilized Weapons.

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Zieg · Posted: Tue Jul 01, 2008 10:41 pm Post subject:

Meh. Good nuff I suppose. Approved.
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Itichi Zieg's Theme - Zetsubou Billy

Roleplaying Characters:
Itichi Zieg
Hyuudou, Kiyo
No 3rd RPC
No 4th RPC
RPG Stats:
Shinobi Rank: (SS) Missing Nin - (SS) Missing Nin
Village: None - None
Fame: 3000
Reputation:
Training Points: None
Inventory: Pending

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Xarnt · Posted: Tue Aug 05, 2008 4:16 am Post subject:

Moved for Editing due to promotion to Otokage.
WIP.
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****Midnight Shadow****

Roleplaying Characters:
Rai, Sophia
Saren, Willow
Ria 'Kaguya', Isabella
Hyuudou, Skye
RPG Stats:
Shinobi Rank: SS Raikage ~ S-Jounin x 2 ~ Missing Nin
Village: Kumo x 2 ~ Kiri ~ None
Fame: 0
Reputation:
Training Points: 440
Inventory: All have many of the following; Kunai, Shuriken, Senbon, Wire, Katana, Speacilized Weapons.

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Kawada · Posted: Tue Aug 05, 2008 8:43 am Post subject:

Proof please.
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Xarnt · Posted: Tue Aug 05, 2008 12:44 pm Post subject:

He told me over msn mainly but he also mentions it here;
http://narutorpcenter.com/ftopic6546-0-asc-0.php - Bottom Post
http://narutorpcenter.com/ftopic6141-0-asc-50.php - Bottom of Page

And he is handing it over IC'ly here;
http://narutorpcenter.com/about6558.html

And if you look at Zieg and kiyo's profiles, you'll see that their both Missing-Nin.

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Roleplaying Characters:
Rai, Sophia
Saren, Willow
Ria 'Kaguya', Isabella
Hyuudou, Skye
RPG Stats:
Shinobi Rank: SS Raikage ~ S-Jounin x 2 ~ Missing Nin
Village: Kumo x 2 ~ Kiri ~ None
Fame: 0
Reputation:
Training Points: 440
Inventory: All have many of the following; Kunai, Shuriken, Senbon, Wire, Katana, Speacilized Weapons.

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