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PostPosted: Sun Oct 11, 2009 12:22 pm    Post subject: Zweihander Reply with quote

Bloodline Name: Gingan no Majo
Clan Name: Zweihander
Leader: None so far...maybe you?
Village: Kirigakure

Clan Description:

During the first great Ninja war, a group of ninjas with skills in ijutsu and fuuinjutsu left their village to begin a top secret black ops experiment on a private island in Kirigakure. It was so secret that even mentioning it was against the law. Yagi and his group discovered a woman here on this island and began to experiment on her after they found that she contained a kekkai genkai. While her kekkai genki was interesting, it was hardly able to satisfy Yagi's tastes. He ordered his agents to capture young orphans and bring them to the island. He took samples of the woman and placed them within the children and noted an interesting result; they would pick up various traits that were held by this woman. The funding for this project was eventually cut, and the scientist involved with the project left the children to their own ends as they escaped the island. The resulting clan would emerge from the  children of the original orphans who lived on the island until a group of hidden mist Ninja investigating a missing ninja headed to this island. They were suprised at what they found; an entire community upon this island. The inhabitants of the island were reintegrated into the shinobi world, and thus their story begins to unfold from here.

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Members of this clan all have light blond hair and silver eyes at birth. When a member of Zweihander gets angry, it may be noted that their eyes become slitted like a repitle's  This clan is also known for their wielding of large swords. Zweihanders can transform into partially at first into monstrosities that are unique in appearance to that individual. After Awakening, a Zweihander's hair color and eye color changes, typically it is to black, but oditities are known to occur.


Clan Personality: The clan over all comes off as cold and heartless, but this isn't the true nature of the clan. Each member of the clan is diverse and unique, however due to their origins and abilities its easy to see how they would come off as monsters.

Bloodline Description: The bloodline of this clan allows gives its members enhanced physical abilities at first, but at a price of perhaps being consumed by this power. Whenever this bloodline is used, the member resembles a monster. They gain enhanced chakra and stamina pools, put chiefly they gain an precedented ability to detect chakra. A Zweihander also may become an 'Awakened'. Doing so they no longer pay a price for using their bloodline powers, but must feed in order to keep up their energy.

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Name: Gingan no Majo
Requirments: 3 point kinjutsu training for each stage
Description A Zweihander's bloodline gives them enhanced abilities at chakra detection. They can detect jutsu being used, and at a sufficient level can even predict what an enemy is going to do based on their chakra. It is said that their sensing abilities exceed even sensor type ninja.

Stage 1: The intial stage of the Gingan no Majo, the user's teeth become sharpened, and their eyes become slitted like a reptiles. Veins begin to pop up near the sides of their face. In this state a Gingan no Majo has an increased chakra and stamina pool to draw from. They gain the ability to sense electrical energy within 20 ft, additionally they can detect if an ally is in a genjutsu due to changes in the brain's electrical signals

Stage 2: Being more adept at the Gingan no Majo, the user can manipulate their monsterous power more readily, they keep the same benefits from the first stage. Their ability to sense electricity increases, they are now able to use their sense to predict an opponent that they are looking actions better through reading signals to various body parts. As a side effect they can detect lies from B rank or lower targets.

Stage 3:  The distance at which they can sense electricity increases and they can now sense electricity over long distances.Their ability to predict attacks improves further. As a bonus they gain the ability to detect genjutsu being used on themselves ~ although escaping it is still a different matter.


    E rank= 25
    D rank= 50
    C rank= 100
    B rank= 250
    A rank= 500
    S rank= 1,000
       SS rank= 2,500




    Stage one: 5 points to activate; 2 to keep active/post
    Stage two: 25 points to activate; 5 points to keep active/post
    Stage three: 50 points to activate; 10 points to keep active/post
    Awakened: 5 points per transform


Note: When a Zweihander leaves a thread, they restore 25 points  to their limits.

Name: Advanced Sensing
Requirements: Stage 3, 4-point kinjutsu training
Description: This ability builds upon the sensing abilities of the third stage of the gingan no majo. The user's abilities to predict the actions of anyone around him, being able to even know what someone in the same thread is saying aloud based on their electrical impulses flow.

Name: Manipulation
Requirements: Stage 3, 3 point kinjutsu training
Description: Being able to sense electricity is one thing, with such an ability one would easily be able to know where an impulse is moving. With this knowledge, the user can break themselves, or anyone out of a genjutsu by spending 30 bloodline limit points. For a similar cost they can put someone under a genjutsu, however then the genjutsu because a visual illusion.


Name: Awakened
Requirments: 4 point kinjutsu training, at least stage one Gingan no Majo
Description: The user breaks past their limit and gain both a human and monster form. In their monster form all of their physical abilities are increased and they gain a number of points that they can use on various jutsu as well as to regenerate. Once a Zweihander awakens they can no longer advance with the Gingan no Majo, however in return they no longer have a limit to how long they can remain use their bloodline; however an Awakened's points do not get restored at the end of a thread and can only be refilled by feeding. If they reach 0 the user will die.


    50 points to restore a limb or organ
    30 points to heal a major wound
    10 points to heal a light wound




    RPC 500
    NPC of a higher rank 200
    NPC of equal rank 25
    NPC of lower rank 5






Clan Jutsus:


Name: Majo no Me
Type: Genjutsu - emotion
Rank: D
Requirements: stage 1
Description: This is a pretty basic genjutsu. The user activates at least the first stage of their bloodline, and glares at a target. The target will then feel a sense of fear and dread run down their spine.

Name: Weight of Eternity
Type: Genjutsu - feeling
Rank: A
Requirements: Manipulation, Stage 3
Description: This powerful illusion can only be cast through the use of the manipulation technique. The target will see the world slowly drain of color. The target will feel like the force of gravity has suddenly increased to an unbearable amount, slowing all but the strongest ninjas, and possibly even rendering weak willed opponents immobile.

Name: Demonic Illusion - Vision of Dreams
Type: Genjutsu - Kinjutsu
Rank: S
Requirements:
Description: The target will be placed within a world where all of their dreams have come true. They will see the things that they wish for, and love the most. They find that they feel a joy that they have never known before. While the target is trapped within this genjutsu they will stand still with a strange smile upon their face. The true damage of this genjutsu occurs if the target manages to escape this world of perfect happiness. Escape is possible, but do you really want to?


Number of Members Allowed: 7
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PostPosted: Sun Oct 11, 2009 1:49 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Looks pretty damn good!  Objections?
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PostPosted: Sun Oct 11, 2009 10:19 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Uchiha Katsuga wrote:
Looks pretty damn good!  Objections?


Yes, give me a sec to edit.

I go point by point, touching on your bloodline limits then the jutsu. Should be relatively easy to follow.

1. How does chakra detection detect what an opponent will do next? Actually, just for a quick point, it doesn't, so start explaining.

2. Specify the amount of chakra / stamina. What's a short distance?
3. I'm assuming manipulate stands for more bonuses, so specify. Specify how you could possibly predict your opponent's actions by detecting their chakra.
4. Specify distance, how the hell does that work, last is fine.

5. That makes no sense. Chakra isn't used for everything.
6. No to putting someone under a genjutsu automatically, but breaking seems fine.
7. Feeding? If it's drinking blood than I will hurt you intensely. Plus, that system will likely kill you based on the fact that people and high rank NPC don't usually die easily.

8.  First two jutsu are fine; last one is forcing people to have different mind sets for the full effect, which is a no go.
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PostPosted: Sun Oct 11, 2009 11:02 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

OzanaruSyra wrote:
Uchiha Katsuga wrote:
Looks pretty damn good!  Objections?


Yes, give me a sec to edit.

I go point by point, touching on your bloodline limits then the jutsu. Should be relatively easy to follow.

1. How does chakra detection detect what an opponent will do next? Actually, just for a quick point, it doesn't, so start explaining.

2. Specify the amount of chakra / stamina. What's a short distance?
3. I'm assuming manipulate stands for more bonuses, so specify. Specify how you could possibly predict your opponent's actions by detecting their chakra.
4. Specify distance, how the hell does that work, last is fine.

5. That makes no sense. Chakra isn't used for everything.
6. No to putting someone under a genjutsu automatically, but breaking seems fine.
7. Feeding? If it's drinking blood than I will hurt you intensely. Plus, that system will likely kill you based on the fact that people and high rank NPC don't usually die easily.

8.  First two jutsu are fine; last one is forcing people to have different mind sets for the full effect, which is a no go.


Inside of a ninjas body there is a chakra circulatory system. Chakra is the spiritual nature of an individual, and as such manipulate it with ease. The concept I am basing this off of is similar to the idea that the nervous system must send a signal to part of the body in order to tell it something ~ imagine if someone were to tap into the wire's and listen to the message. Naturally they would know what the message being sent was and would be able to predict the actions of that body part. AS portrayed in the show, the chakra system covers an individual's entire body. The chakra is shown to be used for various things, and also to be used for simple actions such as running faster and jumping higher. With people who use chakra like this without even thinking, using chakra to predict their actions shouldn't be a big deal.

2. Specify? As in numbers? 20%

3. In the above paragraph I mentioned how you can predict their actions.
4. Specify distance? Do you want it in feet or meters? Cause small to me means about 20 feet, as in the length across a master bedroom in a house.

5.huh?

6. Sharingan puts people under a genjutsu automatically.
7. Feeding. As in eating. Delicious. Awakened Beings are supposed to have a hard time, but if they are having too hard a time I can lower their bloodline requirements.

8. This isn't making people have a differnet mind set, its putting them in an illusionary world that is perfect for that individual.
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PostPosted: Sun Oct 11, 2009 11:11 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Tada! wrote:
OzanaruSyra wrote:
Uchiha Katsuga wrote:
Looks pretty damn good!  Objections?


Yes, give me a sec to edit.

I go point by point, touching on your bloodline limits then the jutsu. Should be relatively easy to follow.

1. How does chakra detection detect what an opponent will do next? Actually, just for a quick point, it doesn't, so start explaining.

2. Specify the amount of chakra / stamina. What's a short distance?
3. I'm assuming manipulate stands for more bonuses, so specify. Specify how you could possibly predict your opponent's actions by detecting their chakra.
4. Specify distance, how the hell does that work, last is fine.

5. That makes no sense. Chakra isn't used for everything.
6. No to putting someone under a genjutsu automatically, but breaking seems fine.
7. Feeding? If it's drinking blood than I will hurt you intensely. Plus, that system will likely kill you based on the fact that people and high rank NPC don't usually die easily.

8.  First two jutsu are fine; last one is forcing people to have different mind sets for the full effect, which is a no go.


Inside of a ninjas body there is a chakra circulatory system. Chakra is the spiritual nature of an individual, and as such manipulate it with ease. The concept I am basing this off of is similar to the idea that the nervous system must send a signal to part of the body in order to tell it something ~ imagine if someone were to tap into the wire's and listen to the message. Naturally they would know what the message being sent was and would be able to predict the actions of that body part. AS portrayed in the show, the chakra system covers an individual's entire body. The chakra is shown to be used for various things, and also to be used for simple actions such as running faster and jumping higher. With people who use chakra like this without even thinking, using chakra to predict their actions shouldn't be a big deal.

2. Specify? As in numbers? 20%

3. In the above paragraph I mentioned how you can predict their actions.
4. Specify distance? Do you want it in feet or meters? Cause small to me means about 20 feet, as in the length across a master bedroom in a house.

5.huh?

6. Sharingan puts people under a genjutsu automatically.
7. Feeding. As in eating. Delicious. Awakened Beings are supposed to have a hard time, but if they are having too hard a time I can lower their bloodline requirements.

8. This isn't making people have a differnet mind set, its putting them in an illusionary world that is perfect for that individual.


1. They don't use it for just anything, so that kind of caves into itself right there. Many fights have been done solely on stamina.

2. Eh, seems fine then.
4. Yeah, that seems good.
5. Related to the first point, you can't sense a person's actions just because you sense chakra.
6. The hypnosis? I suppose, but the difference is they specify which jutsu.
7. Meh.

8. I meant the last part.
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PostPosted: Sun Oct 11, 2009 11:32 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

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1. They don't use it for just anything, so that kind of caves into itself right there. Many fights have been done solely on stamina.

2. Eh, seems fine then.
4. Yeah, that seems good.
5. Related to the first point, you can't sense a person's actions just because you sense chakra.
6. The hypnosis? I suppose, but the difference is they specify which jutsu.
7. Meh.

8. I meant the last part.


1. I don't have the ability to argue this point fully, so I will change the ability to detecting electrical impulses.

6. "This also allows them to use genjutsu normally activated by sound, touch, smell or even taste, meaning any of the five senses, via making eye contact, although in that case they will be rendered as visual." Thats pretty much any genjutsu right? So I'll give you the changing the type of genjutsu to visual, but the rest...

8. Going from a perfect world to depressing reality is bound to be depressing. Its like getting high on crack and then having a hang over.
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PostPosted: Sun Oct 11, 2009 11:46 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

1. Better.
6. Nevermind what I said.
8. Depressing? I would be pissed. Like I said, you can't choose mind sets. People react differently to everything.
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PostPosted: Mon Oct 12, 2009 12:03 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

8. Yes, I had already removed that the first time You told me about it.  All the edits have been made.
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PostPosted: Mon Oct 12, 2009 12:07 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

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8. Yes, I had already removed that the first time You told me about it.  All the edits have been made.


Good; now go get some members. BTW, other mods might comment on stuff so you might have to do this process over again. It's not likely though, I'm usually the most thorough.
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PostPosted: Mon Oct 12, 2009 12:12 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

How do I get members? Have people make characters with the Zweihander last name? If so, what happens when this clan is accepted and they get a bloodline?



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