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Posted: Mon Oct 26, 2009 6:08 pm Post subject: Tactical Jutsu |
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Name: False Heart of Pain
Type: Genjutsu - Visual
Rank: B (Kin)
Requirements: My permission
Description: After the target is caught in this powerful illusion they will see themselves in a barren wasteland with a pure white sky and a pitch black crescent moon. Five seperate chains will rise out of the ground, one for each leg and arm and one for the neck. The chains will wrap around the target tightly, cutting off circulation and choking them, at this point the user will appear before the victim. The user then reaches inside the chest of the victim and rips out their heart, they will then crush the heart before the victim's eyes, this will happen over and over again with the user and the target multiplying each time until the victim feels their heart being ripped from their chest hundreds of times at once. The illusion lasts as long as it takes for it to be somehow dispelled or released. The pain is very real and immense, it causes extreme fatigue and takes a large toll on the victim's stamina to the point where a shinobi of a lower rank than the user would likely pass out. During this time the victim is completely frozen in place and completely unaware of their body outside of the genjutsu, this means that conventional means of freeing one's self from genjutsu will not work and the victim will have to find another way to free themselves, if they can at all. The user of the genjutsu is completely conscious of themselves in and out of the genjutsu which means that they can still move around freely whilst maintaining the jutsu. False heart of pain can only be maintained for a maximum of 5 posts on those of equal or higher rank and 6 posts on those of lower rank.
Name: Immobilizing Ice Block
Type: Genjutsu - Visual
Rank: A
Requirements: My permission
Description: After the target is caught in this genjutsu they see and feel ice rapidly cover over them, in a matter of seconds they are completely frozen inside of a huge block of ice. While they are caught in this genjutsu they are completely frozen in place and incapable of movement. If someone who is unaffected by the genjutsu strikes them or causes them pain in some other way then they will be released from the jutsu. The user of this genjutsu can move around freely while they keep this genjutsu in place.
Name: Doton: Doremono no Jutsu
Type: Ninjutsu
Rank: A
Requirements: Earth as main element
Description: After making the required handseals the user channels their chakra into the ground below them, the earth around the target then almost instantly rises up in the form of several 'arms'. These 'arms' wrap around the target to completely immobilize them and harden themselves to a strength greater than that of steel which means that it would take a huge amount of strength for someone to break free by brute force. After this jutsu is set in place the user can then follow up with another attack. After two posts the strength of the stone begins to deteriorate and it would not require anywhere near as much strength as previously to break free. _________________
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Posted: Mon Oct 26, 2009 9:40 pm Post subject: |
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If these are done, I'd just like to say some things (even if I'm not a mod).
I'd like to see post limits on how long these can be held, and I think the first one should be higher ranked, even if it is Kinjutsu. A rank higher might be fine- after all, if you use it against the right person, they can die easily. Even if they aren't, the person isn't able to continue to fight, and they can't break free the way most normal genjutsu can be broken. It also allows the user free reign of motion in both the Genjutsu and the actual world.
On the others, I don't see any real problems, besides the limits, of course. _________________
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Posted: Mon Oct 26, 2009 11:37 pm Post subject: |
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1. No, you still need to state what they are required to see... Not every genjutsu is begun through the eyes. Also, check your facts. That genjutsu paralyzes.. It doesn't do anything but that.
Edit: "Not every genjutsu is begun through the eyes" this could be taken the wrong way... I mean, that sometimes looking at the hand, looking into your opponents eyes, or making an action will transfer the genjutsu. _________________
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Posted: Mon Oct 26, 2009 11:41 pm Post subject: |
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1. *Eye roll* Check the library
| Quote: | Name: Magen: Kasegui no Jutsu - Demonic Illusion: Shackling Stakes
Type: Genjutsu - visual
Rank: A
Requirements: None
Description: A rather simple illusion, it will make the target believe that they were pierced by several large stakes, which nailed them to the ground. While it is quite painful, it does not bind the target completely, meaning they may still be capable of movement, though they can't change their location until the genjutsu is released or dispelled. |
Anyways...It's a visual genjutsu which has a trigger of visual contact.
Visual on this forum means eye contact. _________________
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Posted: Mon Oct 26, 2009 11:45 pm Post subject: |
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| Yasuo Amano wrote: | 1. *Eye roll* Check the library
| Quote: | Name: Magen: Kasegui no Jutsu - Demonic Illusion: Shackling Stakes
Type: Genjutsu - visual
Rank: A
Requirements: None
Description: A rather simple illusion, it will make the target believe that they were pierced by several large stakes, which nailed them to the ground. While it is quite painful, it does not bind the target completely, meaning they may still be capable of movement, though they can't change their location until the genjutsu is released or dispelled. |
Anyways...It's a visual genjutsu which has a trigger of visual contact.
Visual on this forum means eye contact. |
Lolz... That would be acceptable. However, your genjutsu restricts movement, causes pain, and it affects multiple opponents. It is overpowered if you wish to keep it at B-rank. _________________
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Posted: Mon Oct 26, 2009 11:55 pm Post subject: |
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Sorry, read the last line wrong, mere mistake on my part. However, it still is overpowered. :/ That genjutsu would be A-ranked to S-ranked. I'm leaning more to S-ranked because of how complicated it is. Added with the fact that you are causing them extreme mental and physical pain.
Though that is my opinion on that matter, a mod could say differently. :/
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